Request for feedback on my new wire sculpture instructable.

Hey folks, I just submitted my first set of instructions to the site. I was hoping I could get some feedback before posting the next one. If you could let me know what you think, it would be most appreciated. Good, Bad, the Ugly, what have you.

https://www.instructables.com/id/How-to-make-a-wire-octopus-sculpture-simplified/

I'm mostly interested in how the information is received. If the instructions are clear, if the pictures help, if anything is missing, etc. 

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Hi! I noticed that nobody commented, yet, so I wanted to give you a couple of ideas for you to throw around for the next time.
1. I love the intro. I am a really big coffee drinker and I can relate....
2. Change the links that are all spelled out. Example: Here's a the 'Google Image Search for Octopus' that I used.  If you don't know how to do that, then if I have time later, I can show you.
3.  You have an awesome list of materials, but if you have links to the materials, then people can click on them and see what it is.  Example: Loctite Super Glue Gel.  Personally, if I didn't look under Amazon, I wouldn't have known what that was.
4.  The photos are awesome.  The detail is awesome.  The description is impeccable.  Also, the notes on the photos make the difference because you are telling the reader what you are doing even if they don't want to read everything.  Keep that in mind.  Some people purposely look for instructables that have awesome photos, rather than having to read everything.
5.  The end is very cool.  Again, ending with a funny line or something people can relate to makes you familiar.
Finally, when I noticed the title yesterday, it's different than today.  That's good.  Simple titles are better, yet it's still descriptive.
You really did have a great project and I'm glad you shared it with us!
Thanks for letting me comment. =)
Thrasym (author)  DeandrasCrafts5 years ago
Hi Deandra, thanks for taking the time to comment. Excellent points. They'll certainly help me improve on the next one.

Re:2.-I can and will change what's displayed for links in the future. They're huge aren't they? I never even thought to see if I could...even though I was looking for ways to trim the whole instructable down.

Re:3.-I was actually going to add links to the items but figured most of the people reading wouldn't be anywhere near me and also figured most people would have their own preferences (basically thought exactly what Kiteman is saying in his reply), that's why I tried to describe what the items were and how they'd be used, so people could get what's available locally or use what they prefer, like Gorilla versus Crazy versus Loctite cyanoacrylates (super glue). In the future though, I'll add links to the manufacturers website or the item at an online store, because you're right, someone will want to see what they're all about.

Re:4.-I really just wanted to make the instructions clear, so I'm glad it seems to have worked. I was going to add text to some of the pictures through a graphics program but the photo notes are much quicker. Just need to sit back and wait for someone to actually try their hand at it so I can see how they get on.

BTW, loved the stars and stripes you did, let me know if you ever do a Canadian flag.
Thank you for looking! =) That means alot!
Kiteman5 years ago
I think that the main feedback has happened: it's been featured!

Otherwise, I agree with DeandrasCrafts on shortening links (just highlight the associated text, and hit the "add link" button (it's a picture of a globe, with a couple of chain-links on it).

No need to link to sources for all the materials, though, as most people will end up getting them from somewhere different (thanks to living elsewhere), or substituting something else (thanks to creativity). On the other hand, it is usual to link to items that are hard to find.

As a matter of personal preference, I'd break up some of the longer paragraphs to make them easier to read, but that's just my own taste.
Thrasym (author)  Kiteman5 years ago
Howdy Kiteman, yeah, I am super excited about being featured. Also, shocked, in a good way, I've had a grin since I got the notification on my cell phone yesterday.

I think you and I are on the same page. In the future I will link to manufacturer pages for materials (so people can easily find out what a particular product is, if they aren't familiar with it or don't recognize what I'm using as "similar" to what they use, etc), as opposed to sources or retailers (for the reasons you mentioned).

I did try to break up paragraphs as much as possible. My own tastes coincide with yours. Maybe for the next one I'll try to break it up more and if I feel there's an especially long paragraph of information that needs to stay "together" I can reorganize things to be able to split it up some way. Like labeling multiple sections within each step (so under each section that information could be split up and still remain distinct) or using point-form (so it can be broken up somewhat and still remain as an obvious related portion of instructions).